Wednesday, November 18, 2015

Luis Angamarca

Luis Angamarca
English 1100/35
Professor Young
November 18, 2015

                                                                Gun Control Thesis

  • Thesis: Since two teenagers committed a mass shooting with easily obtained dangerous weapons, gun laws should be changed and people cannot carry weapons of high power or at all.
 
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  1. Prof. YoungNovember 19, 2015 at 7:03 AM

    Thank you for writing your thesis.

    I like where you're going. At the same time, what can you add to end of "gun laws should be changed"? Consider adding a "to" statement there.

    In other words, "gun laws should be changed to...." do what? Your "to statement" is the glue and/or meat of your thesis.

    I look forward to your revision.

    Prof. Young

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